Gymnastics In The Ocean

Hello Readers, 

This term we have been learning to write narrative stories. The purpose of a narrative is to entertain the reader. First we had to make a narrative writing plan. Then we had to make a document to make a story of what our story was going to be about. We had to include similes, personification, onomatopoeia, descriptive words and adjectives. One of my favourite sentences is Angel and Sadiyah set off to find it and caught sight of something in the distance. What is your favourite sentence?

One thing I could improve on is making my story more interesting so people want to read it more. Thanks for reading. Please comment down below! Hope you enjoy my story!

Gymnastics In The Ocean

It was summertime and it was 1:00 in the morning. The temperature was  22 degrees celsius. On March 28th in 1995 there was a gymnast who came from America. Her name was Sadiyah. Sadiyah did gymnastics competitions and she won 10 gold medals. Sadiyah was very flexible and she was also a professional. She was as clever as a mathematician. 

There was also a photographer called Angel who just came back from the moon. While Angel was

on the moon she was looking for aliens and taking photos of different things there. What Angel did

as a photographer is, she took pictures of Sadiyah doing gymnastics. Angel was very bright and

cheerful. Angel is also a professional at taking photos. Sadiyah thought that America was super

amazing and she asked Angel if she could take pictures of her doing gymnastics in a different

setting. Sadiyah also suggested that they could take pictures in the water. 

 Angel and Sadiyah were on the reef next to an enormous secluded island. They could both

smell some rotten, disgusting fish there. They glanced and saw a Megalodon. The Megalodon

swam to Angel and Sadiyah. They named  the Megalodon Doopy.  Doopy was adorable and friendly.

They both felt Doopy. Doopy was very soft and silky. Angel and Sadiyah saw that Doopy was

humongous. Doopy left to go to some of his friends.

Angel and Sadiyah saw a cave and thought that it was super cool and they could go to see what was

inside. Angel and Sadiyah could both see some diving equipment which was a scuba set

to help them breathe underwater. Before they put the scuba set on they could taste the

water in their mouth and they agreed that it tasted very salty and yuck like the stuff they use

at the dentist. Thank goodness for the scuba set. They put the scuba set on and could hear

heaps of bubbles coming out from their mouths. Angel and Sadiyah could also feel the

freshwater rushing against their hands. Angel and Sadiyah started to take photos of each

other wearing the scuba set. They left the scuba set in the water underneath some sand,

at the bottom of the cave.

Angel and Sadiyah took off and left to go to a different place to take photos of Sadiyah’s

gymnastics.

They went back to doing some front handsprings and Angel started to take heaps of photos of

Sadiyah practicing.

Suddenly a girl passed by and asked “Have you seen a scuba set?” Angel and Sadiyah asked her

“Could you please explain what it looks like?” The girl explained, “It is black and shiny.

It is brand new and reflective.” They showed a photo of the scuba set that they just used

and asked “Is this what it looks like?” And the girl replied, “Yes!” Then Angel and Sadiyah

burst out “We know where it is.” The girl exclaimed, “Ok thank you!”

So Angel and Sadiyah headed back to the cave and started peeping for the scuba set.

They could not remember where they put it so they decided to keep their eye out for it.

They kept on searching for the scuba set but still could not find it. 

Angel and Sadiyah set off to find it and caught sight of something in the distance.

It was Doopy. “Doopy, Doopy,  can you help us?” Doopy asked “What can I help you with?”

The girls blabbered “We can’t find the cave and we think that we put the scuba set in your cave.”

Doopy swam in a direction heading to the cave and the girls followed Doopy. The girls suddenly

realised that they were in somebody else's cave the whole time. They found the scuba set and

were so relieved. Angel and Sadiyah headed back to the girl and gave the scuba set to her.

The girl was so gleeful.   

“Thanks Doopy!” You saved the day. Doopy had a colossal smile on his face. So did we.